My name is Mor Bar. I have black hair, brown eyes, I am not so tall but I am not short. I live in Holon, with one sister and one brother. I have a father and mother too, both of them live with us. I am the oldest kid in the family, after me, my sister was born and then my brother was born.
I have a lot of hobbies. I like my friends, I like to go with them to the mall, I like to go with them to play football, basketball, and sport games. Usually, when I have spare time and I have nothing to do, I play multiplayer games like Maple Story and Fly For Fun and I enjoy it. In those games people talk English,so everytime I play those games I speak English and I practice my grammar, and my spelling. I have a friend that usually plays with me in those games, we play those games for like 3 years and we really enjoy it.
My school is a very big place, it has four buildings, but , we don't have enough rooms to learn in, so we have to move from one class to another so(use "and" instead of "so" here) it is kind of diffuclt to do that and it is an anoying thing in our school.
I prefer to learn physics because this is very helpful subject(phr.) and the material is very easy and fun,(Start a new sentence here. You tend to write run-on sentences) there is alot of mathematics in this subject, and I like mathematics. So if we combine mathematics and physics we get very cool material. Also if you learn physics you can be a scientist and this is my dream, to be a scientist.
I don't have alot of expectations from this year, I just want to be a good pupil, get good grades. I also want to get a job as soon as I can because sometimes I have nothing to do at (my) home so I want to try something new like a job.- This can not work as a conclusion of your essay, since it doesn't conclude or sum up any thing you have written so far. You need to add some more to this paragraph in order for it to work as a closing paragraph.
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