School uniform is a special kind of clothes that all students have to wear in order to get into school. The School uniform represents the school and in order to be a part of the school you have to wear such a uniform. Sometimes, when students forget their school uniform they get punished or they are not allowed to get into the school until they wear the uniform.
On the one hand, the school uniform has a lot of advantages; the school uniform is much cheaper than most of the clothes that clothes shops sell. therefore , the school uniform is not really bad, it is suitable for all students. When a student gets up in the morning, he doesn't spend a lot of time looking for better clothes. The school uniform also makes other students look on your real character(phr.), for exmaple: they judge you by the way you talk, behave, etc and not according to the clothes you wear.
On the other hand, the school uniform has some disadvantages; the school uniform is not fashionable, so no one really cares and pays attention to it. The material of which school uniforms are made is not of high quality, and people usually sweat when they wear the uniform and then smell bad.
To sum up, there are advantages and disadvantages for school uniforms. If I had a chance to choose, I would choose the way that people would keep wearing school uniforms(phr.). In order to change the opinion of other people about the school uniform, the company that creates the school uniform has to change the material of which the school unfiorm is made of.
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Thursday, April 23, 2009
Saturday, April 4, 2009
Mr. and Ms. McCall
In the begining of the story we can understand that Burge McCall and Mrs. McCall are married but Burge McCall doesn't buy to(מיותר) his wife things with his money, he prefers to buy things for other women. Burge McCall also behaves horribly to his wife. In the following parts of the story Burge McCall becomes worried for his life and decides to change his behavior. - very good opening!
In the begining of the story we can see that Burge McCall and Ms. McCall don't really like each other. Burge McCall hates the way that his wife looks at him. After a while Burge McCall tries to create a fight between him and his wife but Mrs. McCall just looks at him and(מיותר) with dismay while he calls her names. Then Burge McCall got angry and slapped her. One day Burge McCall dropped into his uncle's drugstore and his uncle said that his wife was there in the morning and she bought rat poison. Burge McCall understood that she might put the rat poison in his food so he stopped eating and drinking at home. Burge McCall also changed his behavior towards his wife to good behavior. - This is good, but you got the tenses mixed up. You start with the present simple and continue with the past simple. You should decide on a tense you want to use, either the present or the past and stick to it.
The realtionship between them was very bad. A husband isn't supposed to be acrimonious towards his wife. Instead, he must be nurturing and loving. My opnion on this particular realtionship is negative, I don't think that it is right to behave this way to your wife. I also felt that Burge McCall wasn't the ideal husband that any woman would ever want. I think that Burge McCall's(מיותר) thinks only of himself and takes care only of himself and Mrs.McCall is a very nice lady that deserves more than a husband like Burge McCall. Moreover, I believe she has got a lot of patience.
Well done! (90)
Daphna.
In the begining of the story we can see that Burge McCall and Ms. McCall don't really like each other. Burge McCall hates the way that his wife looks at him. After a while Burge McCall tries to create a fight between him and his wife but Mrs. McCall just looks at him and(מיותר) with dismay while he calls her names. Then Burge McCall got angry and slapped her. One day Burge McCall dropped into his uncle's drugstore and his uncle said that his wife was there in the morning and she bought rat poison. Burge McCall understood that she might put the rat poison in his food so he stopped eating and drinking at home. Burge McCall also changed his behavior towards his wife to good behavior. - This is good, but you got the tenses mixed up. You start with the present simple and continue with the past simple. You should decide on a tense you want to use, either the present or the past and stick to it.
The realtionship between them was very bad. A husband isn't supposed to be acrimonious towards his wife. Instead, he must be nurturing and loving. My opnion on this particular realtionship is negative, I don't think that it is right to behave this way to your wife. I also felt that Burge McCall wasn't the ideal husband that any woman would ever want. I think that Burge McCall's(מיותר) thinks only of himself and takes care only of himself and Mrs.McCall is a very nice lady that deserves more than a husband like Burge McCall. Moreover, I believe she has got a lot of patience.
Well done! (90)
Daphna.
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