Mr. and Ms. McCall

In the begining of the story we can understand that Burge McCall and Mrs. McCall are married but Burge McCall doesn't buy to(מיותר) his wife things with his money, he prefers to buy things for other women. Burge McCall also behaves horribly to his wife. In the following parts of the story Burge McCall becomes worried for his life and decides to change his behavior. - very good opening!


In the begining of the story we can see that Burge McCall and Ms. McCall don't really like each other. Burge McCall hates the way that his wife looks at him. After a while Burge McCall tries to create a fight between him and his wife but Mrs. McCall just looks at him and(מיותר) with dismay while he calls her names. Then Burge McCall got angry and slapped her. One day Burge McCall dropped into his uncle's drugstore and his uncle said that his wife was there in the morning and she bought rat poison. Burge McCall understood that she might put the rat poison in his food so he stopped eating and drinking at home. Burge McCall also changed his behavior towards his wife to good behavior. - This is good, but you got the tenses mixed up. You start with the present simple and continue with the past simple. You should decide on a tense you want to use, either the present or the past and stick to it.


The realtionship between them was very bad. A husband isn't supposed to be acrimonious towards his wife. Instead, he must be nurturing and loving. My opnion on this particular realtionship is negative, I don't think that it is right to behave this way to your wife. I also felt that Burge McCall wasn't the ideal husband that any woman would ever want. I think that Burge McCall's(מיותר) thinks only of himself and takes care only of himself and Mrs.McCall is a very nice lady that deserves more than a husband like Burge McCall. Moreover, I believe she has got a lot of patience.

Well done! (90)
Daphna.