Cyber Crime

Bareket 24
Holon
24/2/2010

Mr. Castro

Manager

Angles On line

45 Hofyeen street.

Holon

Dear Mr. Castro,

I am writing this letter because I want to join the Angles Online organization. I want to join this organization because personally, it is very important for me to help victims of cyber crimes. Recently, I was(gr. - have been) a victim of cyber crime. I really needed this help and than I found a cyber angel. This cyber angel helped me a lot. After (a) few weeks the stalker disappeared. Since than(sp. then), I realized that the helping a victim of cyber crime is needed and I really want to help other victims of cyber crime.

I think that I am ready to become a cyber angel because I am almost always on the computer. I think that if I become a cyber angel I will try to find victims of cyber crime and help them. I will do everything I can in order to help them. Moreover, I, personally, have the experience of being a cyber victim and I know how the victims suffer of cyber crimes.

I also think that I am suitable to become a cyber angel because I also have experience helping poor animals that lost their family or part of their body and they need help in order to survive. I volunteered(at) the "Best Friend" organization and saved up to 50 poor animals that had to be a part of a family in order to survive.

To sum up, I want to become a cyber angel because I identify with(ww.- understand) cyber crime victims and I want to help them get rid of their stalkers. I think I am suitable for this position because I have some experience. Moreover, I understand the reasonability of helping cyber crimes victims and I want to help them to live (a) normal life with out stalkers.

I look foward to your answer.

Sincerely yours,

Shlomi Califa.

Much better. Well done.

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